Great! I love your metaphors!

Great!

Great! I love it!

"Fall to me and fall on me." Stunning! "Fall to me" is just brilliant.

"It's almost too much to bear." Angsty. I like it.

"We are grains of sand in that hourglass." Beautiful final line. :)

"The night sky bright with the

waxing moon and Venus

as the morning star.

I tremble slightly."

This was my favourite part. The evening star/morning star imagery blew my mind. I like to think of those two stars as lovers, myself. I liked the "I tremble" part too-it's fitting after such awe-inspiring celestial imagery. Keep up the good work. :)

"You make me naked." I like this line-as if Reaper is capable of transporting the speaker back to the moment in Eden when nakedness was nothing to be ashamed of.