What a beginning! You definitely have the reader's attention with that first line. What body? Who was that man? Who's Mindy? What's going to happen next? Great story so far!

wow that was cool! i'd probably say to just slow down a little, because everything seems to move quite quickly, but i guess you could say that in a positive way too! awesomeness!

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This left me curious about what would happen next. It's nice to see you posting here again. I used to be Raven Tiger.

It's interesting, your description creates a strong visual image, without being too long-winded. It's instantly more engaging than my story, I think I might have to try and follow your example.

I'd love to see more.

I'm sorry I couldn't write a longer review, I can't think of much other than "exciting"!