Very visual and perhaps would sound great with some music.

...wow. I am actually crying. haha Don't think I'm pathetic yet. Your writing is really good, its like I'm watching something that is unraveling beneath me. I'm watching the girl cry and the boy be a jerk.

Your talented.

I like that fact that you didn't bother with sugar coated words. My favorite line is "i wish i could burn holes into your brain" You can beat straight up honesty like that.

Thank you for the pleasure of your work.

Saiai