|Reviews for Nothing More Than Noise|
| Sabriel Griffin 2/24/10 . chapter 1
Over all a very nice poem. I like the idea of promise in reality is a lie. I have a few suggestions for you.
and long dedicated eye contact. (This line is awkward for me; I don’t think you need it. Your piece speaks for its self and this just feels like fluff to me.)
It's simple charm delivered with ease, grace.
It's so convincing,
What is a promise?
These are just my thoughts, and me playing with the poem.
PS: I only play with poems I like. :)