Hahha! This was good! (: Can't wait for more.

I really like the detail and description of the scenery. It is really well done. I think it would add to the story more if you gave the characters more of a description as well.

Also, you switch between first and third person a lot. You write both fairly well, but sticking to one or the other would make the story flow better. It can get confusing in parts.

Good start though.