|Reviews for Untitled|
| ClassicStatic 2/3/10 . chapter 1
Hahha! This was good! (: Can't wait for more.
| RaevanWolf 2/2/10 . chapter 1
I really like the detail and description of the scenery. It is really well done. I think it would add to the story more if you gave the characters more of a description as well.
Also, you switch between first and third person a lot. You write both fairly well, but sticking to one or the other would make the story flow better. It can get confusing in parts.
Good start though.