This is really good :)...on a personal level it describes how I feel...it is very raw

I most agree with the person above me, the emotion is strong in this story. My favorite lines was "I thought that I was over you/ like the sun & water." That had me laughing and bumping my friend next to me of how good it was. But I can really relate to this poem. I use to go through the same things with this girl I know, however I think I put her through this. Nevertheless, I'm a changed man, and just hope she forgave me... Well, the hold unforgiviness in your heart. For God can't forgive you if you can't forgive others. Love the poem.

"the regret is strong,

and i can't decide if the memories are any better,

my breath doesn't come as easy as it used to,

and my voice isn't as clear,"

Wow. So much emotion in here, love. Those lines were beautiful. I'm so sorry for your crappy situation. It gets better, keep your head up and make sure that it does get better.

Lovely piece.