|Reviews for Foolish Games|
| leavesfallingup 11/17/12 . chapter 4
I like how you use the metaphor of a song that won't leave your head to describe Abby. It fits well.
I hope that you don't mind, but I spotted three typos:
"he saw a very family figure" should be "familiar"
"It was like a talent he could on bestow upon her" perhaps the word "on" after "could" doesn't belong? Not sure on that one.
Finally, "earphones back in and started to job" should be "jog"
| The Quotidian Life 8/29/12 . chapter 17
Very interesting story. I was intrigued throughout the entire book. Will you be writing a sequel for this?
I really enjoyed reading this
| The Quotidian Life 8/28/12 . chapter 3
I'm really loving this story! It reads really well.
I also just realised that Abby and Jethro are both characters from NCIS! And I'm guessing that this is a coincidence. I live watching NCIS, do you?
| Montara 8/9/12 . chapter 17
Their choice of staying together is not easy...people will talk behind their backs...the age difference, the way he ended things with Victoria (I think he made a big mistake there...he shouldn't humiliate Victoria like that!).
I hope their love is strong enough to go through all that together. They're lucky their families are happy that they are together...
It was an interesting journey. Thank you!
| use.less.woman 11/30/11 . chapter 17
LOVE this one! I guess because I am actually 27 I dont find the age difference to be a bad thing. But I might feel different if I were 15 and thinking about a 46 year old man. I just happen to think there are many wonderful advantages to older men.
The main characters in this story were much more unique than the others. Of course she liked the Soup but I think you did a great job of adding new elements to this character.
I really liked it. Great Job!
| Krullie 11/26/11 . chapter 12
Hi LFF I have a question is Jethro 41 of 46? becouse in the prologe you said he was 41 and now he is 46? Im kinda confused? I dont really care about age. but it is a bit to much.. he is almost fifty and she is twenty, she is my age! The forty one is better compared to the forty six. But hey it is your party so you discise. so what is his real age?
lots of love,
| lady of the taj 7/8/11 . chapter 17
I didn't really like the ending. I felt like the epilogut could have been a regular chapter. I don't know what happened with victoria, what they did that day, or how the rest of their life was. I feel like that's what an epilogue is supposed to do. Tie up loose ends, and tell readers how the rest of the character's life went. A sequel would be helpful.
| Ice Bubble 7/5/11 . chapter 17
It would be funny, though improbable if Victoria walked in on them.
| Ice Bubble 7/5/11 . chapter 16
| Ice Bubble 7/5/11 . chapter 15
| Ice Bubble 7/5/11 . chapter 13
I love Larissa! 3
| Ice Bubble 7/5/11 . chapter 12
Wow, Abby! I didn't know you had that effect on guys.
| Ice Bubble 7/5/11 . chapter 11
This is a very skillful way to end the love. I'm getting more and more impressed by your gift every day. :)
| Ice Bubble 7/5/11 . chapter 10
This was clearly a thinking chapter. :)
In chapter 5. Four, did you purposefully do the symbolical approach to Jethro smoking?
| Ice Bubble 7/4/11 . chapter 6
Oh, aren't you the cutest things!