I like how you wrote this; very simple, very sweet. The narrator seems to be innocent, trusting, and completely in love. It's a very pretty picture. Also, since you put this into the spiritual category as well, I think that this could also relate very well to a person's relationship with God as well as a romantic relationship.

Just a question, why did you put 'him' in quotations in line 24?

Overall, I though this was sweet! Good job!

You're a pretty good poet. Also, I like your username. It's very creative and majestic sounding. "God's Pen." I like it. I like it.