Grr.. gwad, when will you actually give them some peace and quiet?

They're future seems pretty bleak and such.

But I liked hte way you showed that Nikolai's at fault, somehow. that gives a reality to it all.

Hm... update, or not to update

update, or not to update.

update, or not to update.

?

I dunno. I'm content for other reviewers to tell you that.

You're welcome. But I wouldn't say so much about the 'enjoy' bit, because you did make me all angsty and depressed at one part. :S

:P

Narq.

I think you should keep it going...

NO OLAF! but it was still good! :D

Grr... yes it does end on a slightly less sad note, but poor poor poor Olaf and Kolya.

YOU MEAN AUTHOR!

but on another note, good job for turning the roles over. Where Kolya had to help Katya before, she has to help him now.

:S what will happen next?

I don't know what to say.

I am SO MAD at you for doing this to them both.

And I am SO MAD at myself for letting you just take me and run with them, and know I'm so sad and deppressed. You'll need to be careful about what you write in the future.

Words are powerful, you know that, don't you?

SO STOP MANIPULATING US!

Narq.

wow okay where to start this is so good i love the characters, plot and i can't wait to read more about it!

"It didn't matter how far or how hard they: the trees were always there."

Someething missing after they.

"Always, she lagged, though she was burdened with nothing heavier than memories."

Excellent!

"It gave her ample time to stand and the edge and visualise the myriad ways she could slip and fall and die."

Stand ON the edge?

"Nikolai ginned in apology from where he'd lathered up mid stream."

I can see how his experiences might have driven him to drink (8-) but I think you meant 'Nikolai gRinned in apology... '

Very glad to see this story continued!

You've done a heartbreakingly beautiful job with this story and should be very proud of it. You have a way of making the characters seem so real and believable, along with describing what they are going through in a uniquely realistic and empathic way. Well done!

wow. this chapter was wow. You write them so beautifully. Everything is so real it jumps off the page. I loved the description of the forest and how it seemed to Katya as she ran and her vivid dream. I can't wait for more :)

This is such an action jammed, emotion packed chapter. I held my breath the whole way through!

["For the love of God, woman," he panted. She lay on top of him, clutching the grass at his head, likewise catching her breath. She could feel his limbs trembling beneath her. Safe. For now, the thought as always whispered at the back of her mind. "For the holy love of God!"] - that's gotta be my favourite line in almost all of the books I've read so far. It flowed so naturally. It was completely REAL.

The conflict between the two was real too, how they kinda worked together, then against each other. It's believeable, and I think that's really important because when they're under a lot of stress, they won't be "Hey honey, I love you" all the time.

:D

Narq.

I'm loving this story! They are such brilliant and true characters. I can't wait for more!

"With the other she stroked her knuckled down his cheek."

Just knuckle

I really like the extra detail here, the greater exploration of Katya's emotional reactions to her experiences. I know there are writers who over pad their stories, include meaningless verbage. But a constant in your work is leaving the reader wanting more not less.

Since Fp wouldn't let me review chapter 2 because I already have, I'll leave the review on chapter 3.

Breathless. Totally. I had on idea the women would gang up upon her - but then they kinda split and fought against each other too. Poor, poor Eleni! (what would happen if the soldier met Eleni? What would he say/do to her?)

You are just fantastically good at those forbidden loves! Remember the whore/murderer story? :shiver:

Narq.

I liked this a lot. It is refreshing to see the humanity that can be exhibited by those who would normally be considered soulless.

Oh wow! I really like this. What an amazingly brave girl Katya is, willing to give herself in order to save another. The connection she begins to make with the soldier. I was breathless as I read and wondering where this would go. I almost want you to continue so I know whether or not they manage to keep the secret and even stay together, or whether they get caught. Then again I don't want to know, I want to be able to imagine them forming a life together. You did an excellent job with the theme for the challenge.