|Reviews for Anomaly|
| LunaGratia 7/31/12 . chapter 5
This is an interesting story, with not your typical female protagonist, which I really enjoy. Its like a breath of fresh air.
I enjoy a female character who doesn't really give a damn about what others think about her/isn't squeamish about the thought of sex.
I really want to know what happens between Ben, Andy, Molly, and Maria. And Giazzi and Marco are adorable.
Please continue this, if you can.
| Trance19666 12/18/10 . chapter 5
i thought the school guy was going to make them do something together
like work on a team or something.
the fiction is M
are you waiting for later to have the scenes
or did you change your mind?
Austin Dumas sounds nice
and what guy would turn down a hot girl throwing themselves at you?
is he going to be back in later chapters?
or is this it for him?
why does she have the one time rule?
| Trance19666 12/18/10 . chapter 4
i liked this chapter
Anna Molly must really hate Andy if everyone is freaking out over the fact that they were lad partners.
the Twins are really great.
i like how you described them
| Trance19666 12/18/10 . chapter 3
why does Anna Polly hate Andy so much?
what he do?
you really have me wondering what is happening with Anna and Maria.
| Trance19666 12/18/10 . chapter 2
she's the outcast
and her two best friends are the twin hotties of the school
how did she become friends with them?
i don't remember if you wrote that they slept together way back when.
| Trance19666 12/18/10 . chapter 1
i really like this story
and the characters are pretty funny
Anna Molly is cool
and so are the twins
i wonder what Maria is going to do that change peoples lives so much?
| VelvetyCheerio 9/21/10 . chapter 5
Wow. How is it again that Molly has a clean record? She is quite devious, I must say. ;)
Relationships: Definitely want to know what's going on between Molly and Andy. How many times have I said that? Seriously, though, don't leave it hanging out there too long. You want the reader to know there's a reason behind the conflict, but if it's not revealed at just the right moment, they can lose interest. You've dropped quite a few shiny things in this chapter, though, so you're good.
Scene: Speaking of shiny things, XD. I actually want to mention two particular scenes. The first one is Andy jimmying the lock to Molly's car. I also wonder if he's not one of those deviants who likes to break into houses and steal cars. o.o Or maybe he's a part time mechanic? Does Molly even know anything about him? What if he is in the business of professional lock pickers? Hmm. I want to know more. He's just so mysterious!
The second scene, also involving Andy, was his permanent record. O: So, what has he done? What bad bad things is he capable of? Graffiti? Beating up another student? O: Aah! It's just so, exciting.
Plot: Still kind of wonder where all this is going. Things seem to be mainly focused on Molly and Andy's general polarization toward each other. Then there's Maria, but she hasn't really done much so far except give Molly a book and being really friendly. Hmm. This drama thing could prove to be interesting, so I anticipate how it'll turn out.
Ending: Yeah, wow. xD Uhmm, poor Austin? And behind the bleachers? Le sigh. I can't believe he became one of her conquests. The poor soul, forever tainted. u_u Ah well! So how will this affect the plot, I wonder? o:
So glad you updated, I love this story! :)
| VelvetyCheerio 4/28/10 . chapter 3
Wow. I can't believe Molly laughed! Actually, yes I can. XD
Eurgh! I also want to know what is up with Molly and Andy! Does she hate him for real? She picks on him like a third grade boy picks on the girl he likes... xD
I don't understand this relationship at all.
Please update, btw! :P
And yeah, I don't think Maria is going to want to talk to Molly now that Molly laughed. She just lost a potential friend. :( What if she never gets her book back? O:
I like this chapter, very much!
| VelvetyCheerio 4/28/10 . chapter 2
Characters: Yeah, I'm definitely wondering what is up with Andy and Molly. Does she hate him, or hate the fact that she is attracted to him? :\ Is she attracted to him?
And what's up with Maria? I'm gonna throw a wrench out there, but I wonder if she's not interested in Molly in some way. o:
I don't know. You have to update, seriously! This story is really good!
[She thinks one of you has herpes and the other has multiple children by various baby mamas,"] I lol'ed. XD I find her humor amusing and touching.
Good chapter. Velvet.
| VelvetyCheerio 4/28/10 . chapter 1
Sorry I reviewed out of order, but here we go!
Opening: Very nice. It had that hook that I was looking for, I was dragged right in. I also thought it was very funny to see how the title of the story related to all this. Haha. Anomaly. XD It's true!
Characters: As I said before, Molly's character is just so blunt and straightforward, I can't help but love her. She's out of her way horrible, but this makes the story more interesting.
Though, the way she treats Giazzi and Marco shows off her somewhat softer side. She likes them in a I-tolerate-you sort of way. She is also well developed, in that she was a little apprehensive upon meeting Maria, which I liked.
She's not all that of a badass. ;P
Giazzi and Marco themselves are funny. I like how they're not the sort of twins that finishes each others sentences. I think that's way to overused. :P
Plot: I don't know where this plot is going at all! XD I suspect Andy is going to play a factor, and maybe Maria... I don't know! It's good, though, cause it adds to the mystery of the characters and their backstory.
Enjoyment: I give this a thumbs up. :) You're a good writer, and I am certainly not bored! The voice of Molly is enough to keep my eyes glued to the screen.
| VelvetyCheerio 4/28/10 . chapter 4
This story is very confusing, but I love it so far. You do a good job at maintaining Molly's character, though I also want to know what her problem is with Andy.
Maybe he did something in the fifth grade that she can never forgive? xD It's so aggravating! I must know!
Also, I can not guess where things are going with the plot. Andy is weird, too! He seems like the type of guy who just has the secret, that he enjoys using against Molly, even though she doesn't know what it is.
It's also very aggravating. But you have well developed character. Good job with this.
I'm going to be watching this story, I like it. :)
| Mistress of the Arts 3/13/10 . chapter 4
| Mistress of the Arts 3/1/10 . chapter 3
Once again I applaud the humor you manage to keep intact.
Still sensing tension...
And that poor girl. I feel for Sam too. Ugh. I know what its like to have the puking person beside ya. I was partnered with a vegeterian when we did frogs. NOT FUN.
Onto the next chapter XD
| Mistress of the Arts 3/1/10 . chapter 2
oh this is gettin good.
I really like Anna (I choose to go with the first part :P) and her sense of humor. I can relate to her humor (not really her personality but her humor nonetheless)
I'm sensing some possible sexual tension between Andy and Anna. Hehe. Can't wait to see what happens next.
| Mistress of the Arts 2/25/10 . chapter 1
this is very well written.
I like it so far.