This makes me want to keep a merman as a companion too. Haha! The story is fast-paced and at times there are scenes where I wanted it to go into more depth and detail but it's fine. I kinda thought it was a bad idea to reveal the secret to Jonathan but I guess it was a good thing in the end since he'll be teaching Kai how to fight. I also thought that it's careless of Elana to express her relationship with Kai so openly. She should have known that Alados would have spies! Also their love seemed to have blossomed too fast. I thought there would have been more obstacles in the way of their love besides their enemies. What about the fact that she's a human and he's a merman? It would be quite selfish of Elana to prevent Kai from going back to his world just to stay with her.

I do hope you continue and finish. It's a very nice story.

i love your story! i couldn't stop reading,please update soon.

Very well done! it looks like you have thought thru this story and it flows really well. I really can't wait to see how this story will end. Keep writing!

Love your story! :D

nice

Very nice introduction. I found it funny that we learn the name of Elana's dog before we're introduced to her! lol!

And I wonder, why does she have golden hair and eyes? She's not human either?

I noticed a few inconsistencies.

I like that he was scared when he woke up in a strange place with a strange woman. That makes the story more real. But a few things took away from the realism as well.

For instance, why is Elana so strong?

She carried a grown man all the way home? And if she wrapped her skirt around him than what was she left wearing? And why did she fall asleep, waiting for him to wake when she could have just shaken him or put a cold cloth on his head?

Why do i ask so many questions?

lol! Anyway, I like this story so far. The first chapter should always leave the reader with a sense of mystery, and I think you've definitely pulled that off! Excellent. :)

I love this story! But... the chapters seem so short... oh well, I still love it. Please, update soon! Longer chapters, maybe? Lol.

oh! Pretty girl captures merman - nice! What happens next?

this is so sweet, it kind of reminds me of the little mermaid in a way