i really love your story, but when my classmate read this on my phone via mobile site, she told me the story is too predictable. but to me, it's just perrrrfect. kudos to your story. \m/

This is really good. I really like the description at the beginning of the house :D

Wow, this was lovely. Very creepy and strange, nice job. :)

Very well written. Creepy as shit!

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Creepy in a deliciously dark way. The ending was especially...wow.

This is very well written. It has all the elements of being a good chiller story. You pulled it together seamlessly, and for that, I thank you. There were a few spots that I noticed that needed a little editing, such as insignificant little words that were confused with other insignificant little words. O few "they"s that should have been "the"s, things like that. But other than that, very, very good.

-Laz

Very descriptive, and the ending was a nice touch to the story.

This is an incredible story that captures the small town lifestyle perfectly in an ominous harvest.

I really can't stress enough how beautifully written I found this, so I'll leave it at that. Great style, imagery, etc. Also, I loved the ambiguity of the ending, bravo on that.

This was very wonderfully written. The imagery in it was very vivid and beautiful, and the ending was just right for this type of writing. This story was lovely in its subtle creepiness, and it leaves the reader wondering what really happened. Congrats on writing such a wonderful piece of horror.

-Masq

I liked this, i pictured it all in my head and it was pretty creepy. The plot would make a good movie.

This was really wonderful. you painted such a beautiful picture of the wheat feilds i felt like i was standing there. and the tension and creepieness of it, it was really great. i found myself afraid for him, i thought for sure he was going to become a part of the wheat! great job!

Saint

{[ With love, from The Match Book]}

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Very creepy. I like your imagery of the wheat and soil. The descriptions really add to the mood. Good job.