Congrats! I love writing and I want to become a publisher, and I have read your book: Waiting for the End and Missing Silence and I love both. You'll be a pretty good author, when you grow older, I wouldn't be surprised if you're the next J.K Rowling or Rick Riordian. Anyway, I've always wanted to become a publisher, and to see someone on this website becom one, I'm quite happy for them. Hope it goes well, and when you come back on website can you prehaps become my BETA. Since, you've been in the publishing buisness and stuff it would be great for me.

I like you story alot! There are som things i don't quite understadn but i guess they'll be explained later in the story :) update soon!

wow, i love thism is so exciting and twisted, i have no-idea where you are going to go with this!

i await to read more...

luci

wow, this story puts so many mental pictures in my head, it is so well described that i can picture it. i have not finished it yet, but i will, its so good, i want to be awake enough to read the rest of it.

this story is so well done, and i look forward to when i can read more

THAT. WAS. AWESOME! GOOD JOB!

Percy Jackson :D

Josh Newman :)

Peeta Mellark Chubby! Why HIM? I thought you were for Gale :D

Carter Kane :)

Harry Potter ...

Romeo Montague :)

Cheese Of course. One of your favorite things in the world. :)

(Too bad you're allergic to chocolate.)

Oh and Logan Lerman!

Well good chapter though.

OK. This is a really good story. Please update soon.

Chubby! You put Peeta Mellark and Damien Maslin! : Anyway, great chapter. The Logan Lerman thing was pretty funny, too :D

Excellent, suspense.

I like the tone. You did a great job of making it sound really urgent.

Hm... I wonder what this is all about... Very interesting.

You've made the introduction vague enough to make your audience keep reading, but suspenseful enough so that it's interesting, kudos to you.

The only thing I would suggest at this point (and I haven't even read the rest yet, so this might not even apply) is that this is the only chapter you do that on. You want the beginning to be ambiguous, but too much of it turns the reader off.

All in all, awesome start to what looks like a promising story. I'll definitely be by to read more.

this story is pure awesomeness!

I really like this story, it's very original and quirky...Your writing style is very similar to Matthew Reilly's (he's an Australian author who writes action that's sort of like a cross between the DaVinci Code and Indiana Jones)

Anyway, update soon, and your chapters are definitely NOT too long, and your story is definitely not boring :)

It's me! Come on now, eight year old. Seriously? Well, you don't really write like an eight year old in this story. More like...a nine year old. Well, onto my review.

-Your chapters are too log. Shorten them and cut down on the stupid details.

-You aren't that good at history, are you? You just copy pasted from Wikipedia. I can tell. That's plagiarism.

-The names you put don't fit the characters' individual personalities.

-There's no specific plot

-It was boring

-The prologue was my favorite part.

And another thing: you're a girl, right? Well, you have the style of the Jonas Brother's head of wardrobe. In other words: your style of clothes is like that of a gay boy.

OH MY GOD! THAT WAS ABSOLUTELY AMAZING! THIS SHOULD BE MADE INTO A BOOK. I'M SURE IT'S SELL. YOU SHOULD GET THIS STUFF PUBLISHED FOR REAL. I'VE READ YOUR OTHER STORIES, AND THEY JUST NEED A LITTLE EDITING. BUT MISSING SILENCE IS ABSOLUTELY AMAZING!

Wow, your an awesome writer! This should be a book :)

I'm waiting for those books to...I hate waiting for books

it's such an annoying time! ok getting of topic...awesome story!

I loved the prolog- it caught my attention and kept it. But when the first chapter came along, I found that it didn't do the same. Improvements? Maybe instead of big blocks of text, you could try and break it down a bit.