|Reviews for Cold|
| simpleplan13 1/15/11 . chapter 1
"I exhale memories of/you,"... I loved that rhyme. It's beautiful.
The piece is good. I liked the repetition at the end. It kind of showed how serious you are about not letting them in.
The only thing is I didn't get the whole sleeping thing... I loved the lonlieness holding you in place. That was really great, but the idea of you sleeping sort of threw me. I'm assuming you didn't mean it literally but I didn't get how you meant it unliterally. Like are you just walking through life emotionless? Or is it just your heart that's asleep? It was confusing.
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