|Reviews for The Horizon|
| steffxnie 3/19/10 . chapter 1
'Our eyes look past the seals while inside we are making deals with ourselves, maybe we can steal a few precious moments of day dreaming, soul screaming bliss, it's hard to miss something that you don't have. ' I simply love this line. Very well phrased!
I think you can improve some lines though. It would be more effective with more simple/minor sentences. It's also a good idea to divide it into more paragraphs. But I do like this, it's nicely written. :) I hope you write more pieces like this!