|Reviews for The Baby|
| witeaya 10/13/11 . chapter 1
even though this story is short it still touch my heart.
i never would have guess the reason of his melancholy at first.
| Alysia Of The Pen 3/20/11 . chapter 1
Lovely little story. I could nitpick about grammar, but the mistakes are few and far between, so I won't. I like how long you waited to give the twist - in the last paragraph, the whole perspective changes, and our protagonist changes in our eyes immediately. Me like. :)
| Kanari Toneriko 2/3/11 . chapter 1
good job. you made me teary-eyed.
| horsegirl61 8/8/10 . chapter 1
I was totally confused about this story until the very end...but I LOVED the way that it played out. It was great! I can't believe he stayed with her; he's more than a great guy. Very nice writing!
| tamii 6/19/10 . chapter 1
Wow, I was wondering what was the background to this whole thing and I didn't have a clue until the very end. I suppose you could say that his parents were justified in their judgements in the end and I think the ending is so bittersweet. He stays with her because he loves her but he knows that she cheated on him - wow. Great work, I like how you only wrote a couple of paragraphs but the effect is really profound.
| je ne veux pas travailler 3/22/10 . chapter 1
Powerful and captivating?
I think so.
| TakeOnTheWorld 3/22/10 . chapter 1
the ending made me go "awe". this story is too perfect to describe. i lovee it so muchh
| imaginarydeathmuffin 3/22/10 . chapter 1
Very nice, I didn't expect the ending.
I totally understand his mother's additude though...but at least he stayed with Lillian.
| flunkybubbleshorts 3/22/10 . chapter 1
ooh. totally freaky ending.
Totally unexpected. It had this really painful twist to it. And you manages to keep me hooked the whole time.
| just.the.kid 3/22/10 . chapter 1
This probably wasn't your intetion but I could kick Lilian's ass!
WHAT THE FUCK YO? Ok, so he loves them but...how could she? Ugh...nice short story I'm pissed at Lilian tho..
| Liz 3/22/10 . chapter 1
Holy crap! That was sad. Well written and dramatic, cutesy in a way, and so very heartbreaking well done. Never read anything like it!
| CaitlinEA 3/22/10 . chapter 1
Why? Oh my gosh, are you serious?
She cheated? Lillian CHEATED?
And he STAYED with her?
Oh my gosh, that's so sad.
I'd be angry if I were his parents as well.
Thats so sad.
| sunshinernnr 3/22/10 . chapter 1
I enjoyed this story a lot. I think you built up the mystery & suspense well. I thought his & his parents reactions were odd but the ending explained everything. I do wonder how many transgressions Lillian has had and why he did not confront her.