I like how this is simple, but with strong imagery. Great structure as well.

Very good. Flows smoothly with some sharp images: "...the swirls/and swirls/my breath creates..." "silver threads/of yearny breath" I especially like: "the frenzy girls/stifle tight yelps."

"Hands folded into balls." Interesting image. I thought of baking, for some reason, when you make cookies or knead dough.

"While darting across the concrete." I love your use of the word "darting" here.

"A quick step quicksilver girl." Nice wordplay here. Quicksilver - a girl that slips through your hands.

"There's a method to the way you branch your fingers across

my face." Wow. I'm impressed by this line. Your use of the word "branch" here is simply phenomenal! :D

"Ninnies." Ahaha. I'm glad someone else still says this word too.

Keep up the good work, Juliet.

The work is permeating beauty. The chosen meter gave a softness, a flow, an ebb into each line or stanza until the sharp words 'bitten lip' gave its conclusion. "turn myself into / a portrait" was possibly by favorite description in this; though, "hands folded / into balls / in the pockets of / my blue pea coat" is a doubtless second. The applause from the other reviewer was rightly deserved.

*applause*