"Okay okay, hold the phone for a second. What the heck are you talking about?" asked Alex.

Okay, I love Alex's sense of humour.

I definitely think this story could have been fleshed out into 50,0 words or more and that rushing it ruined the great storyline but it's still overall a fun tale to read and I'll get to the second one in a few minutes.

"Ooh, I have an idea. Ask Mystical Morgan to help you! That's what I always do!"

This made me laugh hard haha.

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This story feels like a computer game

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Though I'm still interested

This chapter was great.

This chapter started funny, Alex's ramblings were funny. But the dialogue with Rosa and the "emo" slang etc was kinder annoying. I will read on.

OH NO! THE RED ROCK IS GONE, ha this chapter was better, more realistic action. This story reminds me of Deltora Quest.

Okay putting the spelling and grammar issues aside this is a good start for a story. I think you could be a bit more descriptive in your writing instead of just " blah blah ran and whipped out a freshly enchanted sword" or whatever. I'll read more.