|Reviews for Legends of Archazia|
| greenforests 3/31/10 . chapter 6
"Okay okay, hold the phone for a second. What the heck are you talking about?" asked Alex.
Okay, I love Alex's sense of humour.
I definitely think this story could have been fleshed out into 50,0 words or more and that rushing it ruined the great storyline but it's still overall a fun tale to read and I'll get to the second one in a few minutes.
| greenforests 3/31/10 . chapter 5
"Ooh, I have an idea. Ask Mystical Morgan to help you! That's what I always do!"
This made me laugh hard haha.
This story feels like a computer game
Though I'm still interested
| greenforests 3/31/10 . chapter 4
This chapter was great.
| greenforests 3/31/10 . chapter 3
This chapter started funny, Alex's ramblings were funny. But the dialogue with Rosa and the "emo" slang etc was kinder annoying. I will read on.
| greenforests 3/31/10 . chapter 2
OH NO! THE RED ROCK IS GONE, ha this chapter was better, more realistic action. This story reminds me of Deltora Quest.
| greenforests 3/31/10 . chapter 1
Okay putting the spelling and grammar issues aside this is a good start for a story. I think you could be a bit more descriptive in your writing instead of just " blah blah ran and whipped out a freshly enchanted sword" or whatever. I'll read more.