| Reviews for Rants of the Two Idiots V: Something Scary |
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dail-of-the-air 4/6/10 . chapter 1Great job so far. You can see the connection the two have jumping off the page, but it needs some kind of plot. Your characterization is great, but characters aren't all that make up a story. If this is a drabble series, then it would make far more sense to post them all under one story as a drabble series. That way you're not pressured into creating a plot, and you don't have to go in any particular chronological order. Again, there are some syntax issues as well as minor grammar issues. Some phrases are used in the incorrect context, but the general idea comes off well. Well done! |