|Reviews for Greek Gods and Goddesses Poetry Project|
| A. Barone 5/30/10 . chapter 7
Ah, now here's the Hera poem. I liked it. You captured her vengeful side but interjected a bit of pity in there as well. Well done.
| A. Barone 5/30/10 . chapter 6
I can tell that you hate Zeus and his adulterous ways, but you didn't mention that Hera took out her anger by causing problems of her own...
| A. Barone 5/30/10 . chapter 5
I like how you've given Hades a heart with this poem. Too often you find that he's the bad guy who has kidnapped Persephone. I like how you've given Hades a heart. Wonderful poem!
| A. Barone 5/30/10 . chapter 4
A good poem. You explained the role of Lethe excellently, however I didn't know that Lethe was a minor goddess. I thought it was just the name of the river in the underworld.
| A. Barone 5/30/10 . chapter 3
Again, very nice. I like this poem but the one criticism I would have, would be that you didn't explain how Zeus escaped his father's wrath and how Kronos swallowed a stone in his place- other than that I really did like this poem.
| A. Barone 5/30/10 . chapter 2
Nice. I love this beautifully simple poem. Well done.
| A. Barone 5/30/10 . chapter 1
Nice. Good cadence and tone. You reveal the personality of Chaos quite well here.
| Devil's Playground 5/30/10 . chapter 2
Awh, Gaia. It's such a pretty name.
There are some very good lines in this - I love the ones about her watching over her children, it really helps personify her as a mother. I think you could expand on that idea, though. This doesn't have the same insight into personality/motivation that the Chaos one did, and I feel like you could add to it with how she feels about everything she has birthed, or something like that.
I also love the image of the Earth and the Sky embracing at the horizon - that's so lovely. It's a beautiful thing to imagine, for sure. And, as always, a great ending to the poem - that seems to be one of your strong points, for sure. Your poems always seem to lead up to those final lines, which give a final pow! as the poem ends, haha. :)
| Devil's Playground 5/30/10 . chapter 1
Aah so cool! I've always loved the Greek creation myth - I find it fascinating that chaos was the first thing that existed. I love your personification of it, and your explanation for the motives behind the creation or everything - simply because he wanted people to see his disorder, haha. I love that he seems playful - that's exactly how I would picture chaos.
There was only one line I didn't like: "It was chaos, without noise, fear or war." - Just a personal preference, but I think that you could use a word other than chaos there, since you already refer to Chaos a lot throughout the poem, and in this line you don't seem to even be speaking about the god himself, but just the noun. I know that you have a way of stating things very creatively, so I'm sure you could find another way to word that line that would make it more impactful.
I feel like maybe you could expand on the idea of order - you say that Chaos resents it, but it's necessary. You could put in some examples of why it was necessary / if Chaos resisted the creation of order / etc.
The ending to the poem is excellent. Great lines, and it's an absolutely perfect way to wrap up the poem. The final line, especially, is just lovely.
| Serendipitist Swan 5/30/10 . chapter 1
Hi, I was going to review Persephone's Flight but I saw that you had less reviews for this and I just love Greek Mythology so...
Anyway. I can imagine this so clearly and even though I always thought Chaos was a dark entity now I'm thinking a multitude of colors. Complete disorder and clashing. Needless to say, I thought this was very good. Except I don't know if Chaos was a God. Wasn't he just Chaos?
| Broken Bird 5/28/10 . chapter 1
I really enjoyed this poem. It tells the story without being clunky or unpoetic, if y'know what I mean. Very interesting, in a very good way
| sophiesix 5/14/10 . chapter 2
Short but effective! I wuold consider making it even a titch shorter: consider taking 'she is the' out of:
"Born of Chaos,
She is the true Mother Earth,"
to repeat the three beats of the first line and give a rythm like a First Nations drum!
| sophiesix 5/14/10 . chapter 1
ooh this has a lovely rhythm to it, like a greek chorus or something, powerful. i liked teh way you chopped up teh phrases to emphasise teh meaning. I think you could chop some even shorter, like: "There, for an immeasurable amount of time." could be:
for an immeasurable amount of time.
maybe. but nicely evoked Chaos anyway as well as telling that story of teh first gods. great stuff!
| William G. Thorne 5/11/10 . chapter 12
Take your time! This is a very wise move on your part too, give you some time to gather your thoughts and dish out some very interesting poetry when you come back to it.
| Typhaegia 5/3/10 . chapter 5
Hades is my fave god also... Second place is a toss-up between Poseidon and Hermes. I'd like your poems Persephone and Demeter! Also, you're dedicating a poem to every god and goddess? That's ambitious!