|Reviews for The Flutter|
| The.Wings.On.Her.Back 4/17/10 . chapter 1
This story, almost like a piece of prose, is a beautiful work. It has the potentional to become a piece of art. You use words in very new and interesting way; you are very creative with them.
However, this piece can get a little confusing sometimes. I don't know whether it's the style, but sometimes the grammar gets a little funny, if you know what I mean. There are other things as well that make it a little hard to keep track of. Maybe you could read through it and try to imagine yourself as a new reader, just to make sure you're not saying something that's going to completely confuse your readers.
But I really like this story, it's really artistic and beautiful. There are not many writers who can experiment like you do, so I think you should definitely keep it up.
| steffxnie 4/15/10 . chapter 1
This is a beautiful piece. The idea is simple, yet deep and thoughtful in its way. I like how the girl phrases her words. You have a wonderful style of writing.
Keep writing, cause I love it. :)