huh so her brother is evil too

so doesn't seem like her dad will let her go so easily

ok interesting

Interesting how this story starts out, it feels different than any other werewolf story I've read on here. In that it feels like the classic werewolf characters. I knew something weird was up when her and the cop were talking about her surviving a cliff fall.

Kind of sad though how the chapter ended about her being blamed for her mother's death. But it gave me the background I needed on the characters, and allowed me to empathize with them.

HEY YOU! Hahahahha.. damn it you are good Eli! Better than J.K. Rowling! Keep it up ;)and WOHO I SEE MY NAME :) thanks! FASTTER UPDATE!

aw poor Ivy. It's nice to see a different take on the werewolf idea - and I like the construct of her family.

so her brother is evil and celeste can see the future?

Glad that you updated :D I can totally understand the author's block thing xD Happens to me all the time xDD

Well, for starters, I like Ivy's reactions to Celeste's questions and such. Though I do feel that this whole chapter, the pace is too fast. Take things slower next time :) It'll help. There are some punctuation errors here and there, but I guess it's not that bad :D

A little too much dialog and a little too little descriptions. Maybe you could have described the atmosphere of the family more? Or maybe even the house itself. Hmm, that's all I have to say :)

Hope you can update ASAP! :D

Hmm, did you get a beta to look over this first? If so, your beta didn't catch your tense problems as well as some awkward structuring. I am serious when I say I will beta chapters for you. Your chapters tend to be on the short to medium side and I could whip out a grammatically correct (for the most part, no one is completely perfect at English grammar) and excellently structured chapter. I really want to help you grow as a writer and that requires the type of detailed concrit that I have difficulty giving over a simple review. I am very serious about this. I am usually available during most times of the day with the only exceptions being class or sleep. If you want to take me up on this offer just pm me and I will give you my email address.

Cheers

sharky

nice chapter, towards the middle you switched celeste to Roselyn

Nice introduction of a new power :) Glad to know that something new's gonna happen and I can't wait to find out :D Good developments so far, though I kinda thought that their bickering was a little...weird. Something like the problem wasn't exactly solved, yet they settled down incomplete. I'm not sure how to explain, but it's a gut feeling. :)

Great work, and Merry Christmas! Hope you update again soon! :D

Hmm...this chapter could have used some light editing before you posted it. There were some sentences that were very awkward and several misspellings. Also, I think that you should have prepared us for Ivy's power a little more. It just comes out all of the sudden and your readers are left to think "OMG where in the heck did that come from?" There isn't that strong of a foundation for giving Ivy powers. It is hinted that her mother was a witch but that doesn't explain what powers she had. Also, if Ivy's mother was a witch and not a werewolf, what was she doing with Ivy's (I can't remember his name) father? Her father is pretty elitist and doesn't seem like he would be with someone who is not a pureblooded werewolf...

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sharky

Oh my gosh, I'm so honored to see my name in the "Thanks" section xDD Haha :) This chapter definitely changes the mood of the whole story. First, it starts off super sweet, with the warm morning greeting. Plus, you changed your writing style a little, with all those exclamation marks. It certainly makes the characters more real, though I find that you may have used them too much consecutively. The first half of the chapter in, you have Ivy exclaiming a lot to herself. Or perhaps in the monologue a little.

The chapter was short, but it managed to deliver a huge twist. Totally unexpected, and very satisfying. I'm even wondering if there's another wolf who wants Ivy for himself. And I think that wolf is the one that Cole is supposed to report to. xD

I'm particularly fond of this chapter, and it's a pity that is was so short The thoughts of the characters throughout this chapter was truly able to make me smile and like them even more. At least Jason knows his mistake and tries to amend it even though he knows Ivy's pissed at him. Great work! :) Hope you update soon :DD

Oh, something is afoot! Just so you know, your title should be The Only Hope, instead of The only Hope.

Cheers

sharky

That was awesome! Way to dis Kelsey.

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sharky