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| Punslinger 5/5/10 . chapter 3
This is a good visual description of the tragedy, with strong emotional impact. I think the Bible verse fits well.
| J.A. Fletcher 5/4/10 . chapter 3
This was very good, but I think it moved too fast.
| Punslinger 4/21/10 . chapter 2
I don't see anything wrong with your choice of Bible versions. "Why, of coarse madam" should be spelled "of course." And you stil have trouble slipping frm present to past tense. Otherwise, it is a good chapter.
| J.A. Fletcher 4/21/10 . chapter 2
This is a good start, but you seemed to cut from past tense to present tense. Also, the captain would probably not talk to the passengers while the boarding, though it is possible, so I suppose it is all right. And the last thing is, that calling the ship "unsinkable" and "God himself could not sink this ship" has been subject of huge debate whether it was said at all.
| J.A. Fletcher 4/19/10 . chapter 1
Very good. I thought it was interesting how you compared the building of the Titanic to the creation of Earth, because the White Star Line felt that there was no real difference. A very good story, and I liked the quotes.
| Punslinger 4/18/10 . chapter 1
Well, you warned us about your grammar, so I'll spare you the anthill. The ants might choke on some of your sentences.
I haven't read the Amplified Bible, so I don't know how accurate your quotes are. But if it comes near me, I'll beat it to death with my King James version.
Actually, this is a pretty amusing satire of religion and shipbuilding. But I think you overdid the upper class snobery. I have no objection to people enjoying their wealth and social status as long as they don't keep me from doing the same at my level.