|Reviews for She That I Saw in a Dream|
| Lili Grey 6/22/10 . chapter 1
I don't think there will come a day when I cannot praise you for your imagery. You have a way with adjectives, a magic I believe. But did something happen to the formatting again? The way the lines were broken, it was quite unsettling. The purpose of line breaks and punctuation are to help the reader know how to read, or rather speak, the poem. If these are the intentioned pauses, I am bewildered. There is no flow, no poetic rhythm. When I stopped paying attention to the lines are read it in my head I understood, but otherwise they just distracted me from the bigger picture.
But really, it was beautiful. I'm just a tad confused. I'd love to hear your opinion! Really, your stylistic choices always surprise me and intention is very important.
Anyway, well done!
| I Am The Masquerade 4/21/10 . chapter 1
Very nice. I really enjoyed how you wrote it.