I love you to bits and pieces and you're incredibly hilarious, but in this chapter, you were homophobic, racist, and just plain wrong. You said something along the lines of "Mr. and Mr.? No wonder they didn't work out." Also, there was "non-existent but probably still bomb-riddled Middle Eastern country". What, exactly, are you trying to say? That if it sounds Middle Eastern, it must have bombs and war and terrorism? And finally, HOGWARTS IS IN SCOTLAND!

Mini rant over. I know this is old, but I was rereading and had to point these out.

Translation-Noil, meet Ebony Way from narcissium, state of denial. Have you read "ravens"s fanfiction? She actually got over fifty GOOD reviews. It basically is just as bad as my immortal minus the "trbl" spelling.

Sincerely,

Someone with to much time on there hands at ten at night.

Ah, I see here you have learned the error of your ways. Forgive me.

I am a hardcore fan with discerning taste.

TARDIS! Not Tartus! TARDIS!

It's an acronym for Time And Relative Dimensions In Space! LOOK IT UP!

GAH

This is so funny. I've read the first few chapters of My Immortal before and found it hysterical, but it's so much better with the commentary.

Also I think "ps da oder eson dumbeldor swor is koz he trin 2 be gofik so der!" might be:

"P.S. The other reason Dumbledore swore is because he's trying to be gothis, so there!"

you live in minnesota? haha me too XD only my friends and I call it minneSNOWda. lol anyway this is a funny story!

Salutations again! I made an account, and decided to review the story again. So... yeah. *adds story to the before non-existant favorites list of this account, backs away slowly*

I wasn't going to review again, but I just had to when I read this line:

"So Cujo has magic rabies now. I see. *nervously looks over shoulder, dials phone* Mr. King? The dog died in the book, right? …Right?"

Stephen King's my favorite author, and I just love that line

you know, i didn't even know what fictionpress was until recently? God, i feel so dumb. i don't even have an account here. Anyway, off topic.

You are perfect. not only did you post the monstrocity that is My Immortal(which takes guts, as several idiots out there would probably flame you, not getting it thru their thick skulls that you didn't actually write it), but your commentary is just perfect. i only wish i had an account here and could favorite this. then make another account and favorite again. then again. and again. sadly, i'm too lazy to do that, so you'll have to make do with this single review. Sorry.

I've managed to read every chapter of this, but I think it's only because of your commentary :p haha. It really is brilliant, and had me laughing so much at every chapter :D

I would have been COMPLETELY lost without the commentary :p

It's quite worrying that she thought she shouldn't be flamed for it :p haha

Anyway, thanks for the laughs :D

xXx

What substance are you on and where can I get some?

My friend is showing me some chapters of your stories and I have to say that I'm terribly confused. Apparently she finds it hilarious but if I could read this on my own time and not at school before our finals I would understand this more. So blame this profile user.

NO! She got Panic and The Beatles too! *to Panic and Beatles band members* I am SO sorry you had to be brought into this.

Great commentary. I forgot to mention that in the last review.

This story must have been just pages and pages of red on Microsoft Word... Maybe that's why she left it like this?

I mostly stay on , but my friend told me about this horror, and I just needed to look. HILARIOUS, this story nearly gave me a heart attack, but thank you for making it readable hehehehe. Manly stubble. (And boy thingy into mine, Really? Shoot me. Just pull the trigger! Please! *Walks over to bed, shoves face into pillow, muffled shrieks of agony follow I praise both you, and the level 39 troll. BWahahahahaha.