|Reviews for Forgotten Moons|
| I-am-a-Firefly 6/16/12 . chapter 2
Can you update this?
Cuz it's really good so far.
| burlap 10/4/10 . chapter 2
An interesting chapter, though it was quick. One thing you could do to improve it though is maybe add a bit more description? Other than that, it's good, and I really can't wait to read more.
| burlap 10/4/10 . chapter 1
I like how you opened this chapter-it's a lovely little hook, and it drew me in. Although, I did find one little mistake:
"You'll just have to practise," she said. "After all, practice makes perfect."
-The first 'practice' is spelled incorrectly. The second, however, is right.
| My Parakeet Has Issues 5/13/10 . chapter 1
Very nice first chapter. I'm interested to read more.
Your first sentence was very good and captured my attention. You use nice imagery, too. The scene with the flowers, I could easily picture it in my head in detail. Good job with that.
I wonder if Maria will be able to do the same in the future?
overall, very well written and little mistakes.
My Parakeet Has Issues