Ooh, these are just beautiful! I particularly liked the beginning of the first ones, the line 'ivory lies' really struck me. That and the centre stanza about the sandman's sister. (Is there any reason why the first stanza rhymes and the others don't?)

Your words paint very vivid pictures in my mind, especially in the second poem, which was very powerful.

This is really good actually! :)

Fascinating. All of the allusions and imagery you included make this, for me at least, a remarkably visual piece.

Still absolutley amazing! The flow is perfect and it's well-written :)

WOW this is amazing! The flow is just perfect and the way you described everything... the words you used... It was just perfect! :)