Dune! Really. I liked the first two or three books, but after that it felt repetitive. What do you think; what will Ethan think?

I'm interested to see the conflicts between Old Ethan and the personality that New Ethan is developing. What's the deja vu?

I'd like to suggest making the beginning more striking, more dramatic. Shorter sentences, maybe break up the paragraphs in different places...if you'd like to see what I would do with it, let me know and I'll send it in a private message.

Great start! I love the way you write, it's so easy to follow. I really wonder what will happen to Ethan and if he'll ever remember. Please do continue!