|Reviews for Comfort|
| Mirabella 8/3/10 . chapter 1
Wow, brilliant strong and relateable ending!
I also love the 'blanket of dreams' imagery. :)
| Aerwiya 7/24/10 . chapter 1
This is adorable. I really like the three lines you end with; they sum up the entire feeling of the piece quite nicely.
As always, Keep up the writing!
| simpleplan13 5/14/10 . chapter 1
Thanks for your review! I'm glad you liked the piece.
I like the piece. I think the idea is great and you describe these emotions well. I also like the structure of it getting longer each line. A few things though...
"Your look envelops me in a blanket made of dreams."... This seems weird. A look isn't something that can really envelop something else, plus I thought I can't tell if you mean physical or a look like from the eyes. Plus don't envelop in something. Something envelops you.
"You keep eye contact too long. I have to look away because I could fall into them forever."... You say eye contact in the first line, but then refer to them in the second. It should be it.
Still the rest of the piece was very cute and sweet.
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