i like the dark tone and some of the diction in this piece, such as the line "We are the children of a broken nation"

i also like that it's somewhat vague and open to interpretation.

a few minor things:

"wrotten" - "rotten"

and some of the commas feel out of place: after "strife", after the first "line", and after "lies".

finally, you ditch the rhyme scheme at the end. i'm not a huge fan of strict rhyme schemes in the first place, but the lack of consistency feels a little odd.

overall, though, nice work.

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i luv this! it's a bit different from how you usually write, the set up anyway. its like a new flavor! guess that little writing hiatus did some good? LOL! anyway, i could critique if u want, but i won't...except to say that you spelled rotten with a "w"...unless you meant wraught...which means something else. but u know that. i think my fave line is the first one. i know why this seems so different to me now but familiar...it feels like something i would write. hee hee. yay!