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| Open your eyes Chopstick 6/9/10 . chapter 1
It wasn't that bad. I liked how you added questions in the end. It really made the impact of the poem. One suggestion:
for this part of your poem, although after a while i understood what you meant to say, it still wasn't clear enough. "I saw a rich girl risk everything for the poor man of her dreams;
watched a father threaten lives to save his son" At first I thought you saw the rich girl watching a father threaten lives to save his son. I later figured out you meant YOU saw that scene on TV. You just need to clarify it by putting the word "I" infront of "Watched a father."
Again, good job!
Do you mind R&R my stories/poems? Thanks!