Wah! Wah! :'(

Get rid of the explanation at the end. It ruins it, and it makes me feel that you assume I am stupid because I am a reader. I am not stupid, and I thoroughly enjoyed this little poem until you made me feel that way.

On a content note, the fact that you used a static rhyme scheme and managed to use it to augment your poetry is fantastic. Very few writers here have that ability. Keep it up.

-thewhimsicalbard

Whoa...thts deep :)

so sad :( Ilove how it means so much