Concidering the fact that this should be taken as a sad poem you did a very well in showing that.

You did a nice job of creating a picture for the reader, and just how you wanted them to see the picture too.

The rhyme scheme is very well made.

My favorite stanza was the 3rd one because it really made alot of things come into perspective for the reader as to how you feel towards the whole event that is taking place.

Overal this is a wonderful poem. Keep up the good work!

-Keree