|Reviews for Trap|
| Slaaty 10/6/10 . chapter 1
I can definitely relate.
One correction: "no matter the way the ocean pulses" does not make complete grammatical sense. No matter which way the ocean pulses would be much better. However, does it ruin the rhythm you were trying to create?
| in theory 6/23/10 . chapter 1
Serene. I misunderstand how the title connects? It's quite vague. I do enjoy vagueness but this is stretching comprehension and accessibility quite a lot.