|Reviews for Come to Life|
| waltrluvr fanfiction 6/22/10 . chapter 1
I absolutely LOVE your storyline (or at least what's there so far)...
Some (hopefully) constructive critisism? Some of your sentences seem to be run-ons. I always find re-reading everything outloud clears this right up.
Also, a few of your sentences have confusing verb tenses (though, this was more in the first chapter than the other two...).
Other than that, amazing! I like your characters (Eve seems to be so sweet) and the humour you put into their names (Adam and Eve... :D ). I can't wait to see what happens to Eve next!
| Darcy Braiden 6/20/10 . chapter 2
Hah, the end of this one's cute and I much look forward to seeing this budding romance blossom