I really like the way your lines blend into one another. They have a nice flow going and the addition of "I do" fits pretty well. I think it might feel a little more natural if you changed the ";" to "-", though. The second half of the poem was my favorite, definitely. "Nights under the streetlights glowing" is good imagery and rolls off my tongue. The ending was great. Nice job.

I always wonder: is family really what keeps us together or is it the wall that seperates all of us?

I love this poem! Very strong :)