I really like this prologue! It had a good mysterious tone, and I'm excited to read more :) Maybe you could read my story, Ishiki. I'd love to hear your opinion on it :)

This is definitely very atmospheric. I love the dark tone you've set for the story, and you've definitely done a good job of introducing the basic plotline to the reader quickly and efficiently (haha something I tend not to do as well). I'm looking forward to the next chapter and getting to know this murderous Prince P

Wow, this was a really good prologue. Every time I read your works, they get better and better. You have a unique style and approach.

You have a very good approach and I like how this begins. I'm interested in seeing what the next chapter holds.

"These were the thoughts of an unknown man."- i've always thought that if you are talking about what you just said, than you use the word "Those". If it's words you are about to say, you use the word "These."

I agree with dice Darwin about the "unknown man" but it doesn't throw me off.

Okay, i liked it. The flow was nice, and diction was great! I like how the character thinks. Very mysterious. good job. :)

Seems like a good open. Strong writing, interesting character.

A question, though: why is he called an "unknown man" in the second paragraph, when his name is revealed so soon after. And he's a Prince, no less. If it's that he's unknown to the reader, that doesn't have to be stated, as we already know that we don't know him. If it's that he's unknown to others in this story realm, that would make sense except the fact that he's a Prince and they're usually well-known. So why call him "unknown?" To create unnecessary and unfitting mystery? Or did I miss something?

But that's a very small thing, something that crossed my mind. I still like this so far and will be following it.

Good luck with your writing.

Still just building up. I'd like to see more. LIttle short compared to the epic long ass works you used to do. It's good to know you're still here. I just finished my little bout through Boot Camp so now I"m ready to come back on FP and try to catch up on your works and try to get some crap out too. Nice job. I hope to see more.

OMG I LOVED THIS!

and yeah i love his philosophy about anything that's pure was meant to be tainted d: somehow the feminine features of his make me think of jack the ripper and his female victims... hm. but well, interesting person to be inspired by

Wow! This sure is an intense prologue! Even with this one chapter I can tell this is gonna be some dark story, and I normally like those! This is great so far! Great job as always! By the way, sorry to ask in case you don't want to, but would you like to see my new story called Oria of Araceli? I'm working on chapter 8 of it as I speak.

I liked how the prince and the white rose are connected, I can't wait to see how this story turns out.

Rayne