You changed this since I read it last. Nice, I like the changes you made.

A few things:

"and knights always came in pairs or quartets, like the Beatles band." - that metaphor seems a little slapped on; I don't think you need it.

Also, In reference to the squire/knight, is his name Will or Lance? You kept going back in forth with both names. And Gwen thinks, "Every squire always seemed to have been named Will." But he's a knight, right?

Overall, very nice job! I like the cross of modern day with Dragons. :)