This has such a lovely stream-of-consciousness feel to it. I enjoyed reading it.

I liked the within/in internal rhyming in the opening stanza-it definitely helped with the flow of the piece.

"The sons of a god no one can see." Brilliant. My favourite line from the poem.

"You fucking bet I am." Marvelous ending. I like the allusions to Galileo and the 'bug' motif, as well.