|Reviews for They Left This Part Out|
| OrangeXAngel 8/7/10 . chapter 1
Aw...this is too short for it's own good. x) This is very cute(again)! I laughed at the whole 'how to shake your hair' and 'post on twitter' part, I never really thought about that. I think the 'vague song about a girl you dated for five minutes in the sixth grade,' a nice line since it contrasted with the whole 'fangirl' thing, and I like how he falls for the girl that doesn't care amidst the ones that are screaming his name and fainting everywhere. :D Good job!
| MeAsIAm 7/18/10 . chapter 1
Popstar school - haha. That was really good.
I like the vagueness of the whole thing. It makes the story more appealing.
I notice that you tend to concentrate more on the 'incident' than the 'characters'. It would not have worked well for some, but it works well for you!
| Passionately Yours 7/14/10 . chapter 1
Haha I see that you like to write about famous people very much. But it's all good! They ARE always interesting to read anyway.
| Greatheart 7/14/10 . chapter 1
I liked this one. It's a little far-fetched that he'd see someone in a sold-out concert hall and have a love at first sight experience, but I'm willing to suspend disbelief. Nice use of lyrics, too. I don't have any other criticisms. Good job!
| the sun softly smiles 7/13/10 . chapter 1
Love this - the sudden vulnerability despite all the defenses and preparation... fabulous. Nice job :)
| Raindrops Melt Away 7/13/10 . chapter 1
| jeepers09 7/13/10 . chapter 1
This was good!
| R. Tist 7/13/10 . chapter 1
Popstar school? Genius. :"D Love at first sight through throngs of screaming fans? Genius-er.
| Launo 7/13/10 . chapter 1
I really like the beginning. It sets the story very well. The lyrics were well written.
"Texting at yoursold-out concert."
There should be a space between you and sold-out.
I felt that the ending effectively closes the story, with reference to the beginning. Good job!