This is VERY well written, and I really like the use of descriptive writing techniques that you've used throughout the story. It gives off a very dramatic effect. You're a terrific writer, Kuri!

Wow. I liked it. :) *nod* At first it was kinda confusing, but I could really feel what the character was feeling. You used description very well. :) And I read some of your poems too. :) They are very good.:)

Nice! I'm kind of lost on the ending, but overall it was good.