The ending of the chapter was cute. Lando's actions are pretty funny. :)

Okay, this is a great story so far! Despite some minor errors, I found this story interesting. This is one story I'm definately going to read over the summer! ;)

I'm sorry Irene hit you so hard. I remember being terrified for it - my Dad, his girlfriend, her two daughters, and I went down to South Carolina exactly when the hurricane hit. As it turns out, it hit harder back home. D
Also, I'd be willing to join your community about elves.

I already know how to do archery. My aim isn't perfect. Anyhow, archery is brilliant! Just like your story, actually.

AHHHHHH! TWINS! I see what you meant! Btw I LOVE their names!

TWINS!

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Twins!

Haha I love when they fight! I'm glad it ended so well. As for the name... I thing its fine.

You can't do this to me! Please write a seqeul! I will DIE if you don't! Can't live with not knowing what happens next!

Loved the chapter and the end of it! Please update soon :D

Oh my god. I love this story so much! The ending of this chapter was so cute! Keep writing my dear, and I'll be waiting for the next chapter!

No please don't change it, I like it thatthey are married!

I don't have any ideas, but I am reviewing so that must count for something.

You have to edit this. I'm not too sure how your beta edits your work, but he/she's missing out a lot of your mistakes.

You need to edit this. I don't mean to be rude, but you need to work on your grammar. The story is good, but it lacks finesse, if you ask me. There isn't much drama, which is rather ridiculed but really makes a story, and Ranaya does not sound like an eighteen-year-old. She sounds much younger, around fourteen. Just keep editing and soon you'll have a very good story. That's my advice.

I love it

but I didnt want the baby to die! at least make sure they have another one that lives

update soon!

Perhaps if Landrian was somehow forced by his cousin to attack (directy or indirectly) Zachavi?

By the way, good chap.