I personally thought that her escape was the best part of the hole chapter. I've seen that escape in a couple movies (DO NOT ask me which ones they were, I could not remember their names even if my life depended on it) and you had it written down so well that it sounded better than those visuals in the movies. This chapter was one of your better ones. Keep up the good work.

Ooh, nice cliffy once again. I like this concept with the magical image of the ground swallowing her... I noticed it before too and now I see there's a reason for it. I assume it has something to do with the trident or maybe this happens only when she holds it? I really like it though. And I'm glad she was able to escape and find her way back, only to face another obstacle the moment she thought she was safe again. Poor Em, but that's what happens on an adventure... there's hardly ever time to rest. As always, beautiful work. I hate that the next chapter is the last of the summer but I'm still excited to read it. Update soon!

god i hope thats the end of black freakin death.

aw maannnn...last chapter? say it aint sooo.

this chapter felt very short...or maybe cuz i read it too fast. eh wuteva cant wait for next weeekkk

"Tearing her eyes away from the trident, Em watched Black Death Mewbaran straightened up."

This should be "straighten up" or "as Black Death Mewbaran straigtened up."

She's standing in front of her mother's killer? Oh man. Em totally needs to beat the life out of him after that. I hope Em gets the honor...

Just FYI, factitious does not mean "broken into factions." It means artificial or insincere. If that is not the meaning you intended, you may want to switch it out.

Woo! I love Em. We haven't seen her solo like this in a while, and it's refreshing to see her kicking butts and taking names again. She doesn't need a man! And I love her rage and her thirst for revenge. I thought the fire was a nice retaliation.

To answer your concern, I thought the chapter was believable. No worries. I thought the blue bed sheet was clever, too. And I'm glad that Dread Robins is okay, too. Good stuff.

I'm looking forward to your next update (though I'm sad that they won't be as frequent after the next one.) Anyways, good work as always, and update soon!

I think it's a fine balance of fantastic action! I like the ending touch of the burning - it just doesn't make sense for Em to go without taking her revenge!

Poor Louise. Her nerves must have been frayed from all the worrying. At least she has someone *cough* to take care of her and keep her from becoming too lonesome, eh.

When you said "the deck rose up to catch her" I'm assuming magically? Because when Em and Robbin escaped Atlantis you used "the sand rose" to capture Robbin or whatever and it seemed as if that was a figure of speech. Or was that both figures of speech. O.o/ Cool. I liked getting something right!I hope Robbin gets more gentle. I know he isn't like that and Em just ignores and accepts, but I still figure she would be emotionally hurt with how little he outwardly expresses his concern. I mean, she is unconscious most of the time he's freakin' out over her. I mean, that's why he's freakin' out. LOL. Maybe you could make it a conflict. Him getting guilty? Remember the mermaid's tear, blood, virgin and all? I don't think he apologized enough. But hey! It could also just be their dynamic, I mean no one's absolutely perfect? DAYUM. I want to have more of Robbin's inside thoughts if you need something to write about. I don't know how that's going to happen but it would be awesome! Keep writing!

i love those indirect romantic moments. i absolutely love your storieas, they arn't just the cliche romantic stuff, it actually has substance. The plotline is absolutely magnificent! Can't wait for the next installment... i wonder if they are ever going to formally get together?

I love your fight scenes and always look forward to you updating. I hope this isn't Black Death's way of trying to gain the crown or something like that.

Poor Em, always the damsel in distress. I would be nice she was saved for good... highly unlikely, but it would be good for Roger's health.

Can't wait to see what the plans are for Em and how to get her back! Great suspense and action in this one! Great job.

You never cease to amaze me, Lady! I like how you write your fight scenes, their not all dolled up like in other stories. With all the blood people be spillin' I'm surprised Captain Robin's ship hasn't been dyed red yet!

Em's been kidnapped... queen-napped once again! I'm starting to think Em'll give Roger a heart attack before this stories done!

Sincerely,

Captain Amarantha Catafalque of the Superior Sin.

P.S. sorry I never got to properly review your story before, I had a killer headache, and a huge pain in my back. But I loved that chapter as well.

Oh no! I had a bad feeling something like this would happen. I hope nothing awful happens while she's captured. I feel like they really won and there's no hope left for Em and Roger... especially with the trident gone. I'm freaking out right now, but I'm confident you'll fix this, you are an amazing writer after all. I'm going to be so sad when you start school again, but in the meantime... update asap!

NONONONONOOOOOO! Please don't rape Em. JACKASSS! Roger will cut you all up! If Em has awesome pirate super powers passed down her momma, it'd be nice to see them now. I hope her goddess Helena comes and helps her out, since she is fighting for her, ya kno? I loved the action in this chapter. It was really detailed and I felt like I was actually watching it happen. You must have researched a lot about ships to write this, ey? Thanks for the dedication! Can't wait for the next chapter. I hope this series never ends.

Well, I wonder why Black Death wanted Em so badly. Hope he doesn't rape her. And if he does, I hope he gets a very slow and painful death that takes days, maybe weeks, or months to kill him.

hahah i soo called it! i knew they would get raided. oh you and your cliffhangers, honestly. sigh update soon

"While fully exposing the starboard side also left it wide open to the Black Panther's bow chasers, a concerted round of gunfire took out the two cannon."

The construction of this sentence is a bit confusing. My initial interpretation was reading "while" as "though." I had to read it three times to understand it. (This may just me being dense.) A potential revision could change that first phrase to stand alone. (?)

"Now in his early fifties, his age was a remarkable achievement for a member in his profession."

Might be nit-picky, but I think "member of" is the more conventional phrasing. But at the same time, I see why that your use of "in" may have been intentional.

You know... I think Mythbusters actually did an episode one time on whether a knife running through canvas could slow your descent. I think it was busted (but this is fiction and it works quite well for you- so we can just ignore that.)

Hm. I like the fact that Em is showing signs of fatigue. It's the rational reaction. Maybe you could alter your writing style through there to reflect her weariness. I just feel like shorter, choppier sentences might represent it better. I do admire your writing style, however. All of your sentences really seem to be carefully constructed, and they are wonderfully descriptive.

Ah! What a roller coaster chapter. First, I thought she was gone. Then, I thought she was saved, but in the end, she wasn't! She's been captured again... sort of makes you nostalgic for the first time Em was kidnapped and taken aboard a certain pirate ship. Luckily, she's not the same woman she was. And Roger's been injured. I trust that you won't kill him off this early, though you reserve the right to kill off any of your characters whenever you like. But I'm off-topic. Good emotional arc in this chapter. I really enjoyed it.

But there is that cruel cliffhanger. You know, you've spoiled us with these regular updates. It's going to be sad when they stop in a few weeks! In the meantime, though, update soon!