|Reviews for The White Wolf|
| doors down 8/26/11 . chapter 20
This chapter felt rushed. It sort of felt to me like it was kind of like, "This happened, then this happened, then this happened" only insert, "the five went hunting, then they caught a sick cow, then they went to the wolf packs den"
I really enjoyed Marthas back story. Heh. I guess pet ownership is kind of slavery eh? And I liked that she was from BC cause thats my favorite place. SO lovely there
The new characters all seem interesting, and I look forward to more of them.
Interesting chapter though. Thanks so much for the update! You made my day :)
| doors down 7/21/11 . chapter 19
I don't understand why they would go east? What's the force behind it? Is there food east? Or what? I mean, wolves are driven by instinct right? Is there a key to her past life there? Her ultmate destiny, I don't know, but it seems to me that going East would lead them to man, and that certainly is not a good thing.
The different perspectives on humans were interesting. On the one hand, you have the view that men are all evil, and on the other you have the view, that no, men are good and bad. I wonder if Nanu is overly negative, or if our young heroine holds the overly positive view of man because she has not seen to much of them? For that matter, has nanu had lots of interactions with humans, or is he just believing what he has been told? Either way, it says a lot about both there characters. God the more I learn about the white wolf, the more i admire her. I mean, this a person who has starved, lost her whole family, and yet her viewpoint on mankind shows that she has retained an optimization. I just love that.
Towards the end, when they stared into each others eyes, to me, I think they knew each other in a past life, and were lovers or something. I mean, it's so obvious! I mean, these two are perfect for each other! Oh, I just wish they would hurry up and have babies together! Then they can be one big happy family! OH PLEASE, PLEASE! SWEET, SWEET WORLD, MAKE it HAPPEN! PLEASE!
As far as the whole chapter is concerned two words will sum up my reaction: Fucking Awesome. the requirements for a classic White Wolf 97 story are here, the gorgeous picture forming prose, the non-stop engrossing details, This chapter WAS short, but as usual you didn't waste a single sentence kept me interested the entire time. LOVED IT! :)
| doors down 6/27/11 . chapter 18
The interesting thing about this chapter was the sight of the humans. I think you did a very good job of describing what a wolf must think when they see a human. It's kind of amusing because, I bet to primitive people, the white wolf would have been viewed as a demons pet or something.
| franz 5/12/11 . chapter 17
Had to do it this way, because login is disabled.
I really enjoyed watching the elk fight. You did a good job of describing that part, i mean it was really realistic, but very entertaining. You feel it could have happened. one thing i liked about this chapter is i found it amusing that you would go from nanu and aniu having fun one moment, to the next where they savagely kill an injured animal, and then go back to play time and fun and think nothing of the slaughter. i liked reading the scenes between the white wolf and her friend. there chemistry is obvious and there playful behavior made me smile. and nanu has had some strange experiences eh? that was a VERY interesting part, a solid chapter, nice and long, and a satisfying conclusion with not a whole lot of misery. That was much appreciated because i needed a smile. thank you. Great job!
| doors down 4/25/11 . chapter 16
OH...MY...GOD... YUS YUS YUS! SUCH BREATAKING ACTION! ONE HELL OF A CH!
what a perfect ending!
I FUCKING LOVED THIS!
| doors down 4/25/11 . chapter 15
WHAT THE HELL? THATS WHERE YOU CHOSE TO END THE CHAPTER? DAMN YOU! WHERES THE REST OF IT! I WANT MORE!
i loved this chapter. i was a bit surprised with tonrars appearance, a little shocked at how brutally he dealt with the other wolf, (i was expecting him to just beat him up a bit, in no way did i expect such a savage butchery. although, i admit it WAS entertaining to read) and surprised by how quickly he led her off to mate with her.
this chapter was short, but you wasted no time in engaging the reader, and now i just wish i could see what happens next. you have got to update soon! please please PLEASE! UPDATE!
until you do i must wait for the next chapter.
| doors down 3/19/11 . chapter 14
excellent! the white wolfs hatred of torar leaped of the page! and through it all, there was a darkness, and towards the end, a fear, a fear of the unknown thing that advances upon them. there is plenty of emotion in this chapter, and here you demonstrate your ability to make, the reader feel what the author is feeling, the rares and most precious ability an author can have
| doors down 2/3/11 . chapter 13
the actions of tonrars pack confuse me. i mean it seems to me, if the other pack had no food they should be weaker, not stronger. why then not stay and fight them? it seems to me they'd have had an easy victory.
awesome writing! your ability to make the english language into such a beautiful arrangement of words with such consistence and seemingly little effort continues to amaze and delight me.
tonrar, of course, is still repulsive. it saddens me that the white wolf would so easily bow down to the tyrants wishes regarding nanu. as i was reading their interaction, i was thinking to myself how much savage pleasure i would have gotten had nanu chosen that moment to burst in and rip the leaders head off. maybe next time?
| doors down 11/24/10 . chapter 12
This chapter was fucking awesome! right away it plunges into breathtaking excitement, with the swift arrival of an enemy wolf. the fight begins.. what a fight scene! i mean, it all happened so fast, yet i could see it... that was the true power here, seeing it unfold in your mind...seeing nanu bite the other guy... awesome!
Nanu wrapped his jaw around Vondur's forearm and squeezed, breaking the skin and drawing blood. Vondur yelped and slid from underneath Nanu, crawling some distance away and turning around, remembering not to turn his back on his match no matter what. Nanu's expression was wound up into the most demonic way possible, his eyes red with bloodlust and rage
I fucking loved that part, beautiful, just beautiful!
| Briana 11/24/10 . chapter 6
I absolutley agree with the great blance of the world, nice way of showing it!
| Briana 11/24/10 . chapter 5
nanu souns like an interesting chracter...sad tho that he didnt look after aniu! hope i see more of nanu!oh and i love that name: nanu hehe
| thefluffmysters 11/24/10 . chapter 11
Wow! This was really epic!
ANIU! WHAT DO YOU THINK TONRAR WANTS FROM YOU?...he wants you to have his babies...
I love how she was like "who is the dark one?" LOOK AT NANU! ITS NOT THAT HARD TO FIGURE OUT! And also, she is REALLY indicisive about things. "I can't stand Tonrar, but then again... i think I might stay."
Nanu is so sweet! I, as I have said, love him! 3 How he protects Aniu!
*sigh* I had a much longer review ready, but it looks like it deleted itself. Who knows, maybe it'll pop up along with this one? Either way, this ispretty much the gist of what I'd put on the other.
EPIC CHAPTER! ]
| thefluffmysters 11/24/10 . chapter 10
OMG! Aniu is So FREAKIN' naive! My God, even I knew that Tonrar is a wierdo! God Aniu, I know that your dad never really gave you the "Boy Talk" but you have instincts, do you not?
Nanu: way to protect Aniu! I luv Nanu, as I said in my last review.
I never liked Tonrar...wierdo.
Alright now this may sound like a random/stupid question. But is Tupit that last wolf who showed up randomly that Tonrar...did things to?(gross) Or maybe it was Tupit's mom? That would explain Tupit being half-dog, or if Tupit was the one, that would explain the markings and scars... just wondering.
Great chapter, very emotional.
| thefluffmysters 11/24/10 . chapter 9
Wow! This chapter was pretty epic! ...toward the end it was a bit...graphic, but still, it was epic!
Yay! Nanu is back (for now, anyway...) I luv Nanu, he's awesome! He reminds me of someone i know...
I felt bad for that wolf who got hurt, hope he's okay...
Poor Tupit, not being able to have any wolf fun... well, she probably wouldn't like it, but still...
Tonrar frightens me O.O he's got issues, and since he seems to have a thing for Aniu, I don't think she'll go for him... but, what do I know? lol
Great chapter! ]
| Vernelley 11/23/10 . chapter 2
It's been a while since I looked at this, so pardon any reader errors.
The first thing that really stood out was the fluency of your writing, which was excellent. I don't think I noticed any grammatical errors at all. It also felt like you really knew what you were talking about, like the life cycle and habits of wolves. The narrator's emotions during the incident were all really realistic as well. The only thing I'd suggest is having a look at some of the paragraphs towards the end; a few of them start with 'I' so I'd suggest trying to vary the start of the paragraphs. Overall, it was a great chapter.