...*drools*...

This is Marcus. Thomas's mind has been blown by the awesomeness that is this story. He would like me to inform you that he thinks that you're amazing!

Oh and that maybe the descriptions were a little abrupt maybe inserting a line when you're editing it so that the difference can clearly be seen.

Otherwise he's still muttering something about amazingness.

hm...

Thomas and Marcus

What's the Master going to say! I can't wait to read the next chapter and find out.

Punctuation and grammar fixes needed, especially in the damn dialogue. They read like one has an extremely long breath.

AMaZing...whats that i smell in the air? I wont tell but i still have my own thoughts...

Thomas