Whoa. Whoa whoa whoa whoa whoa.

That was awesome! Very nice-very dark. :)

Oh my! This one shot is really good. One can feel the woman's pain and the man's fear, guilt and regret. The ending is just perfect. I like it.

You build up tension really well in this. Usually I prefer numbers to be written out, but using only figures in this is actually quite effective :)

One thing: "Why won't he say something the woman thought to herself." - this needs either a comma or a question mark to seperate the thought from the actual narrative.

This was intense!