loved the last stanza. true :)

I'm finding it very difficult to choose a specific part of this poem I can say is my favorite; it's just wonderful. The poem as a whole skillfully pulls you in and then completes itself in a very timely manner that just makes it sound so simple, yet complex. A great piece.

Cheers,

K.G Marque

that's sad when a pretty world is just in mind.

This is gorgeous! And amazing considering there were two authors... it honestly sounds like one smooth voice.

I think the only thing I would change would be to create a uniform structure. If you guys were feeling up to the challenge.. maybe try threading the stanzas together using the concept of "turning"?