PLEASE UPLOAD! THIS STORY LOOKS REALLY INTERESTING!

interesting, can see the aim but got a little lost at the end when the bodies fell in the ocean and the man's comment. would be nice if u explained that a bit. also didn't really feel any emotion from your protagonist. he just lost his family need to feel more from him, just a thought. but all in all good attempt, looking forward to seeing where your going with it. wouldn't mind betaing for you either:)