The last line is a winner. The rest is great too. :)

Haha nice ending! Great and unique as usual! Keep writing!

Anna _

Lol. Cute, very cute.

Ah. Karma sucks. lol. But it's still good to be courageous, in spite of karma looking to catch me off guard. :D

Oh well done. It's all bullshit :) Go back to your fearful self.

ah, so is life!

you get so pumped up, motivated, and eager to start a new and what happens? Karma! or better yet, ill timing and lack of cunning, knowlege, charisma, etc...

wonderful piece, and of course with your added witty flare.

-William

i thought the rhyming worked well for the first three verses, and perhaps teh last, but in the middle it got repetitive, i think this was compounded by the shorter phrase lengths which brought more focus on the end rhyme - I wonder having half rhymes or non-rhymes could maybe reflect the changing attitude of the narrator, to try a new thing? Dunno - maybe it would fall flat or bite you on the rear, lol.

Love the image of decaying hope, and riding with a winner's pride. And a great (an characteristic) sting in the tail! :D

"And it bit me on the rear"

:D LMAO!

This sounded silly in a good way, like it was making fun of something.

The rhyming was a little bit of an over kill to sound strictly good, but I think that added some quirkiness to it.

This was good. A good laugh at the end there. This poem reminds me of Kipling.

lol clever

A simple yet meaningful poem, showing how fear isn't a bad thing, because it protects us from doing something we may regret. Nice job.