|Reviews for One day at Lauren's|
| HighOnBrokenWings 8/23/10 . chapter 1
This kind of seems like a shell of a story, not to be mean or anything, but there wasn't any real oomph to it, nothing to have readers wondering what would happen next, and nothing seemed to lead onto the next.
Sorry if that sounds blunt, but I would say that this is more a frame work than an actual story or chapter.